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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #30 on: August 03, 2011, 06:14:34 am »
Hey all, appreciate ur comments, somehow please keep giving me suggestions and critics, tell me how's my writing style, or if the plot of this story until this chapter is clear enough for u. I'd love to read that and improve my writing ability. Anyway, no more update until the end of this week, bunch of tasks and tests @school, thanks  [arms] *hugs and kisses*
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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #31 on: August 03, 2011, 06:55:05 am »
Hey all, appreciate ur comments, somehow please keep giving me suggestions and critics, tell me how's my writing style, or if the plot of this story until this chapter is clear enough for u. I'd love to read that and improve my writing ability. Anyway, no more update until the end of this week, bunch of tasks and tests @school, thanks  [arms] *hugs and kisses*
miny according to me in terms of literary or story is good so do not hesitate to continue to make, always wait for a sequel, hopefully the task of "school could be completed well  [lovestruck]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #32 on: August 03, 2011, 07:00:54 am »
Imah,

Hugs, thank you for ur comment and encouragement. This year will be my last year of Junior High, so its kinda busy for me here. I'm doing my IT essay right now, totally stressed out  [cry]
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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #33 on: August 03, 2011, 07:10:13 am »
Hi Miny....thanks ama apdetannya.

Style elo unique. Jadi I have not much to say. Di chapter 3, pacenya rada cepet, karena tiba2 ternyata Seb dan Libby udah ngelwatin acara dinnernya, tanpa didetailkan. tapi yang penting kan kita2 ngerti...Dan ternyata hasil dari dinner itu, Seb-nya jadi kepikiran terus yak ama LIbby? Wahhhh....siap2 deh Seb gak tenang tidurnya, mimpiin Libby terus. Which I like... [lovestruck] [lovestruck]...Tapi ntar, diceritain gak tuh mereka harus nginep di mansion selama 3 hari??? Harus yaaa....hehheee....

Thanks buat updetannya. Biar lama diupdet, tapi jangan ditelantarkan dunk Min....

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #34 on: August 03, 2011, 07:21:34 am »
Mawar Jingga,

Sorry buat km bingung, tapi perhatiin deh kalimat ini

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“Entah itu membatalkan kontrak bisnis, atau menuruti amanat terkutuk Jaimes,” Seb menyambar kursi plastik dan duduk, ia mulai memijat pelipisnya dengan kasar. “Tapi pintu bagi kekasih lain sudah ditutup. Jaimes tahu identitasmu, ia bertanya sebelum memberitahu tentang rencana menginap sialan itu.

Seb sama Libby belum kencan semalam, Jaimes ngerubah rencananya dr kencan semalem jd kencan tiga hari  whistling Hmm, kalau gitu aku bakal tambahin bbrp kalimat biar nggak ambigu lagi, and thanksss untuk komennya  [clap]

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Udh kutambahi, semoga ga ada yg bingung lg...  [smiley]
« Last Edit: August 03, 2011, 07:24:39 am by minyounglee »
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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #35 on: August 03, 2011, 07:24:36 am »
Imah,

Hugs, thank you for ur comment and encouragement. This year will be my last year of Junior High, so its kinda busy for me here. I'm doing my IT essay right now, totally stressed out  [cry]
yes the same, can only help with prayers hopefully graduate with a satisfactory outcome not let his struggle in vain [love eyes]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #36 on: August 03, 2011, 07:56:11 am »
Mawar Jingga,

Sorry buat km bingung, tapi perhatiin deh kalimat ini

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“Entah itu membatalkan kontrak bisnis, atau menuruti amanat terkutuk Jaimes,” Seb menyambar kursi plastik dan duduk, ia mulai memijat pelipisnya dengan kasar. “Tapi pintu bagi kekasih lain sudah ditutup. Jaimes tahu identitasmu, ia bertanya sebelum memberitahu tentang rencana menginap sialan itu.

Seb sama Libby belum kencan semalam, Jaimes ngerubah rencananya dr kencan semalem jd kencan tiga hari  whistling Hmm, kalau gitu aku bakal tambahin bbrp kalimat biar nggak ambigu lagi, and thanksss untuk komennya  [clap]

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Udh kutambahi, semoga ga ada yg bingung lg...  [smiley]

Sipppp...Emang gue aje yang lemot...terlalu semangat membaca, jadi melewatkan detail2... [hmpfh]...

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #37 on: August 03, 2011, 08:27:52 am »
si seb mulai selingkuh dr pacar pertamanya nih, matanya sekrg tertuju kpd pacar boongannya [hmpfh] kemajuan nih, seb,, perjuangkan ya [laughing]

begitu jg miny, semangat terus [smiley-gen013] [smiley-gen013]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #38 on: August 03, 2011, 10:46:03 am »
"benak Seb membayangkan ujung cangkir kopi itu digantikan oleh kulitnya. Gejolak hormon Seb mulai memasuki tahap berbahaya." [on] [on] tahap2 mimisan udin dimulai slanjutnya terserah anda [laughing] [laughing] *iklan mode on [hmff]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #39 on: August 03, 2011, 11:00:58 am »
^
Sesama teman sesat dateng nih  [on] [on] my twin  [hmpfh]
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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #40 on: August 03, 2011, 11:22:24 am »
^
Sesama teman sesat dateng nih  [on] [on] my twin  [hmpfh]
sesat2 gini pan ajaran si 4 ema ----> ema mi,ema nem,ema yem,ema LUD *catut komen kokom [laughing] [laughing] tutornya si Bleeh [on] [on] [hmff]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #41 on: August 03, 2011, 12:27:21 pm »
^

ebuset kenape ane yg jadi tutor seh?! ujung2nya ane yg kena gini  [head break] [head break] 4 ema harusnya duo bikin sop iler  [hmff] [hmff]
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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #42 on: August 03, 2011, 06:04:35 pm »
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ebuset kenape ane yg jadi tutor seh?! ujung2nya ane yg kena gini  [head break] [head break] 4 ema harusnya duo bikin sop iler  [hmff] [hmff]
[head break] [head break] [head break] [goodgrief] [goodgrief]

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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #43 on: August 03, 2011, 09:15:21 pm »
^
Sesama teman sesat dateng nih  [on] [on] my twin  [hmpfh]
sesat2 gini pan ajaran si 4 ema ----> ema mi,ema nem,ema yem,ema LUD *catut komen kokom [laughing] [laughing] tutornya si Bleeh [on] [on] [hmff]

 [nono] [nono] [nono] apa nih ane diikut2in [whip] [whip]

^

ebuset kenape ane yg jadi tutor seh?! ujung2nya ane yg kena gini  [head break] [head break] 4 ema harusnya duo bikin sop iler  [hmff] [hmff]

bwahahahahah tutor [AddEmoticons04246] masternya 3 ema aja ane ga ikut bikin iler2an #polos [AddEmoticons04274]


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Re: The Wildest Affair of Ours
« Reply #44 on: August 04, 2011, 12:16:03 am »
minny chukaeyo buat FF barunya [smiley-gen013] [smiley-gen013] [smiley-gen013] mian baru sempet komen [hmpfh]

gw suka sama nama2 karakternya, Elizabeth and Sebastian terlihat kuat sesuai dengan karakternya and gw juga suka dengan penyingkatan namanya Libby and Seb ,unik dan mudah di ingat [heh] and judulnya bikin merinding disko tp demen [hmpfh] [hmpfh]

Chapter 1 : pertemuan yang nampak terasa dingin2 empuk [hmpfh] [hmpfh] biasa kan bos model seb yang dengan dinginnya bilang " Jangan rubah penampilanmu" jgn2 takut kesihir ama penampilan polos nan cantik si Ms reyes [hmpfh]

chapter 2 : waduh si Seb punya rencana dibalik udang tuh sampai2 melibatkan Libby buat ikut andil sebagai pacar pura2nya pasti buat bisnis,ckckckkkkkkkkk

chapter 3 : GUBRAKKKK deh Seb, baru aja rencana buat jadiin Libby pacar pura2nya tp udah berfantasi aneh tentang Libby dalam mimpinya  [drool] [drool] apalagi waktu Libby menyesap kopinya , si Seb bayangin andaikan gelas plastik itu adalah kulitnya [on] [on] gimana ntar nasib Libby di mansion waktu acara menginap ,bisa2 Seb minta bobo 1 kamar lagi ama Libby [hmpfh] [hmpfh],

Minny, thanx for spending u're time for writing a FanFic again, and i love how u describe this caracthere even not so detail but i can understand what u mean. and keep on a good work coz u have a capability on writing , so Hwaiting Minny dongsaeng  [huglove] [lovestruck]


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